That two month revision took six months. On the whole, I am happier. The whole last third works far better. The voicing, overall, is far more consistent. The tangled webs are more tangled.
Now to farm it out. My most curious reader will be an Egyptian. I am honestly not sure what she will see, but that is why I am giving it to her. If this work does not speak outside of my circles, then I have failed at something. I'm not a publisher. I'm not writing to the mass market. I'm writing for humanity, no matter what market that might be. Maybe I've succeeded. Maybe not.