The chapter starts in one place, travels, hangs out at the next place, travels, and hangs out at a third place. What I need to do is to cut both travel sequences, cut the two towns into seperate chapters, and rewrite-rewrite-rewrite. I have some great opportunities here to build tension, develop the world a bit, and push at my characters. That's all good stuff.
Jen asked me what I like about my lead character. What I like is that she is shamelessly bad, but she's not nearly as good at it as she thinks that she is.
